Matt Bellamy

Firstly, your rhyming is a bit strange. The first line doesn't rhyme with anything, and you use words with the same sound five times out of eight - hill, will, ...

Ooh, haikus are difficult. The first line is good. The second line, well it depends if you're talking about one fish or two. You say fish breaks, which sounds like ...

Ahh, my first poem I loved was about the rain too. I think this rhymed a little too much, I mean, eight out of thirteen lines rhymed with be, or ...

Less questions, and less of this: ........ It doesn't add anything to the poem, and your words should speak for itself instead of relying on excessive punctuation. I would change ...

This was okay. One thing that niggled at me was that the rhymes sound a bit forced, so much so that I felt you were just saying things for the ...

I hate it when someone writes a poem which gives me nothing to criticize. Telling you what's good is still helpful, aye? xD Well, I love the ending, the way ...

Firstly, all your it's should be its. It's is short for it is, and its means something belongs to it. This will be a winter, without snow, without Christmas. I ...

You sue big words! :P Well, more unusual than big really, which made this difficult for me to read, because I didn't really know what you were trying to say. ...

I really like this - it's very cute. I can't quite get my head around the first line, but it sounds so good that I don't mind. Maybe add a ...

Walking into the kitchen, where my mother's at. This sounds a little to informal. Like, "hey, where are my homies at?" I smile back and beam at her - using ...

Distingt to touch, though left unfelt; Distinct, you mean. A breath of life that keeps some sane; A fix; escape; it wakes the brain, pumping passion through your veins; the ...

I’m trying to make it easier you know. I'd put a comma after easier. then when I loose myself away, Loose or lose? I'm not sure which you meant here. ...

I want to know you; --The use of a colon doesn't make much sense here. My hometown. My own body. --I would change this to My hometown, my own body, ...

I liked the ending, too, it is a little lonely, especially the lambs... I don't think you need the first line. I mean, the title already explains what the poem ...

Very well written, I like your style. The indentation of that line in the first stanza is nice. Someone once said to me that poems which only address a single ...